My name is John Nicol from the Goldenloch in North Fife, Scotland, to-day I have been offered a slot by the local radio station, this week end on Kingdom FM, Kindom being the Kingdom of Fife, always keen to try and encouarage newbies to the sport to help replace dwindling numbers, I agreed to give it a bash, what they want is up to 8 bullit point statments about what we have to offer and a prize with a value of up to £30 so we will offer two day tickets, Im pretty sure weve been picked as we always give prizes for their charity events and they have recently started promoting village events, art galleries etc, my Ideas are, and please feel free to add or subract it has to be finished by Thursday

THE GOLDENLOCH FISHERY

The Goldenloch is a family friendly, fly fishing loch, set in the beautiful countryside of North Fife, Established in 1985 that's 26 years experience.

Fly fishing as a sport is one of life's most rewarding experiences, we provide the opportunity you only have to provide some ability and patience.

Lessons can be arranged by qualified instructors or just come and rekindle your past fishing skills using our equipment and some friendly advice, all are welcome.

Mums, Dads, Grannies, and Granddads, young and old, its for all to try, Boat or Bank, BBQ area, Toilets, Equipment hire give us a call on 01337840355 or 07968006367

Its a sport that allows you to pit yourself against nature, using modern angling techniques and abilities, its a sport that nature still occasionally wins and defeats the best.

Anglers young and old come here to relax and enjoy the tranquil settings, surrounded by nature, Ospreys, Sea Eagles plus many more that visit daily.

Relax, unwind, laugh, think, retry, unruffled, patience, practice, gentle, precise, accurate, tidy,

Add in how to get there by the major roads.experience of what? ie fishery management catering for single anglers/parties/famillies etc etc.
perhaps you should be adding help is on hand for the less expierenced, without having to pay for lessons, as per your next paragraph, but get the help bit in before the instruction bit!
be specific, rods reels line flies etc etc
mebbes add in biggest size of trout caught, and variety stocked.

sorry to sound like a lecturer, but you need to impart as much info as poss in the short time you will have.
well done on your initiative to get air time for your loch in the first place.
is a brill opportunity.
regards
bert

Maybe add something about price and show how cheap it is on an hourly basis i.e you can pay just £20 for 10 hours fishing which is only £2 an hour - much cheaper than most other sports

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Ask the guys who fish your loch on a regular basis, for their feedback. Do you allow bait fishing? Do you have a fishing lodge? would it be better to book a session? Do you do a family ticket? Can i hire tackle, buy flys & any other items i might need? Remember your web site . These are just some of the questions i like to know when going to a new fishery. Also the post code for the satnav. Best of luck.

This is good stuff, couldnt sleep, got up, had a look, now my heads gonna burst thanks boys making a new draft

OK here is my next attempt but now i have to go to bed as its nearly 4 and the cormorants will be here soon

THE GOLDENLOCH FISHERY

The Goldenloch is a small family friendly fly fishing loch, set in the beautiful countryside of North Fife, Established in 1985 that's 26 years experience looking after anglers of all ages.

Easily found at KY14 6HZ, The Goldenloch can be found of the A91 Edinburgh / Dundee road turning up the B937or beyond Fruchie on the road to Newburgh on the B937, where the big sign says HAVE YOU A PLUCKING PROBLEM just turn in there, after 1 mile we are on the right.

Fly fishing as a sport is one of life's most rewarding experiences; we provide you perfect opportunity, you only have to bring yourself, and a little bit of patience with help on hand for the inexperienced, we will soon have you catching fish.

Lessons can be arranged by qualified instructors or just come and rekindle your past fishing skills using our Rods, Reels, Nets and Flies everything you will need for the day, plus loads of free friendly advice, all are welcome.

Mums, Dads, Grannies, and Granddads, young and old, its for all to try, Boat or Bank, BBQ area, Toilets, Equipment hire give us a call on 01337840355 or 07968006367

Its a sport that allows you to pit yourself against nature, using modern angling techniques and equipment, its a sport where nature still occasionally wins however and often defeats the best but it gives hours of pleasure.


Relax, unwind, laugh, think, and retry, unruffled, patience, practice, gentle, precise, accurate, tidy, have you got what it takes to be an angler, try it, you’ll not be disappointed.

It's nearly 4am - go to sleep man!

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Oh my God!You forgot the "FUN " element.
Good luck.

I would leave out the bit about "a little bit of patience", I think it could reinforce negative stereotypes of fishing for newbies and for parents who believe that they or their children "would never have the patience for it"

Not sure about "where nature still occasionally wins" - it may interest those who like a challenge but put off those who want instant gratification and guaranteed success, an apparently increasing segment of the population.

Good luck - hope it goes well

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The cost of fishing is missing. Highlight the price of fishing against the cost of some other activities. The rest reads very well. Good luck.