Hmmmmm...........
Thought long and hard about this, but what the hell.............
The lad is doing his best, and is to be commended for it. he will learn, given time and encouragement.
His hackle proportions donīt seem that far out to me. These are a matter of taste in any case. There is no standard length. This is a hackled fly, on a winged fly they would probably appear too long.
http://www.flytyingworld.com/PagesE/...tippedkehe.htm
I often prefer sparse flies as well.
The fly pattern is often given as the " Black Ke-He", with hen hackle.
This is a good example of the original, although sometimes the red wool is tied beneath the tippets.
http://www.fish4flies.com/img/Flies/...He%20Brown.jpg
There is no herl showing through the thread, I blew the image up;
The head is Ok with me. Crowding the head is a mistake many beginners make.
Constructive criticism is all very well, but it should be done kindly.
I didnīt see anything to laugh about.
Also, if somebody is unable to dress a half-way decent fly after a week, he might as well give up. Anybody who needs years of practice must be bloody hopeless.
There are two ways to avoid the "bump" when tying in the wool, or floss. One is to tie the wool in and take it up the shank to the same point as the herl tie-off, and the other is to build the body up with floss after tying in, and before winding the herl. hardly anybody does this nowadays, and because nobody sees the bump, except on a step by step, nobody cares.
I would have no problems fishing with that fly, and I donīt imagine the trout would either.
The herl body could be more even, and the tying in of the floss and tippets more accurate, but apart from that I canīt find anything much wrong with it.
Obviously it is mostly experienced fly-dressers who do these "step-by-steps", and one can not really expect the same standards from a young lad who is only just starting to dress flies.
Could the fly be "improved" as far as appearance goes? Certainly, but the fish couldnīt care less about that either.
Cromie, when you are tying these things, tie at least half a dozen, and preferably a dozen, before you show a step by step. I would take long odds that this is the first such fly you tied. It is practice which makes perfect.
TL
MC